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Q. More and more people are shifting to cities from countryside. Does this have advantages or disadvantages on environment?

#q #people #cities #countryside #environment
There is no denying the fact that the main environmental effect of public
imigaration
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immigration
migration
 from villages to cities
are
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 arguable. In
this
 essay, I shall describe both advantages and disadvantages and explain my point of
views
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. There are
people
 who argue that the environmental
beniefits
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benefits
 of settling down in the cities considerably
outweight
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outweigh
 it
is disadvantages
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. The main reason for believing
this
 is that
this
 community may use another type of transportation.
For instance
, the authority
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have
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tohave
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build
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built
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 a railway which makes it more
convenience
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 for
population
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the population
a population
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 to use it,
where
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it hase
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hase
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has
decrease
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risk
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on
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of
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 pollution.
In addition
, the high number of
public
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 might help in the development of the
city
. Indeed,
this
 makes it clear that
environment
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 will not be impacted by community immigration.
On the other hand
, there are
people
 who believe that
environment
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the environment
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 may harmfully influence by
such
act
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acts
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.
people
 often say that increasing the
number of
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apply
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population in the cities will raise the total waste.
Therefore
, the
environment
 will suffer deeply. To illustrate, a
prestegious
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prestigious
 journal article published that 30% of the
city
 waste
were
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grew since the huge increase in the number of
city
immigrant
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immigrants
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.
Thus
, it
become
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 apparent that the more
people
 who live in the
city
 side will affect the
environment
 in
dangerous
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a dangerous
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 way. In conclusion, both arguments have a
merite
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merit
. On balance,
however
, I believe that the negative
outweigh
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 the positive.
Hence
, requires more attention.
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