Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and given your own opinion.

In today's competitive world, some people believe that children's
sense
of
competition
should be stimulated,
whereas
others
think that cooperative kids are able to become worthy adults.
However
, I would like to argue that
cooperations
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among kids are required to spread love and
prosperous
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.
This
essay will discuss both views and highlight my opinion. On the one hand, children's cooperation in their childhood could sculpt them as useful adults.
Competition
is an essential part among people which cheers communities to
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in an achievement battle.
Moreover
, folks should concentrate only on their victory and not on
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defeat. Every
competitors
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should play their game with
friendly
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attitude.
For instance
, a person who
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his own defeat and
celebrate
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winner's
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success is a real winner.
Eventhough
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Even though
the person achieved something in a corrupted way, it is considered trash.
On the other hand
,
sense
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of
competition
shouldn't be motivated unless the person is
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enough to think genuinely.
In addition
to
this
, Injecting
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sense
could shape
child
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a child
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to react in
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manner.
For example
, if the children's one and only target is winning, their minds can think outside the positive box. Despite
this
,
a
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numerous amount of kids exist who never use any faulty tricks to decline
others
.
Sense
of
competition
can be encouraged a bit, but need to assure that it shouldn't be
misused
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. In conclusion, I would like to argue that
competition
should be taken
easy
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. Losers are not meant to be useless, they just need more practice.
Moreover
, no matter what
others
think, we are trying. Consolation prizes should be awarded to each and every
participation
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to make everyone feel happier.
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