Nowadays, people are not as fit and active as they used to be in the past which creates health issues in the long-run. Why do you think this is? What measures can be taken to solve this problem?

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contemporary epoch,there is a heated argument over the issue that

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modern era,individuals are not physically fit and active rather

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which creates health problems in the long run.I fully support

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given mentioned phenomenon.

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,supporting points will be

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on in the upcoming paragraph with a logical conclusion. There is adequate evidence for

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view which is substantially the first and foremost reason is the development of new technology

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present-day cities

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smart cities in

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way an individual gets a lot of benefit from

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smart world they can book online taxi on their smartphones to go from one place to another so the masses

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to walk so far and they become lazy and unfit.Adding more to it nowadays individuals buy their houses and apartment near the metro station in smart cities so they can travel easily from one place to another. Probing ahead in

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every individual uses a smartphone, or laptop to make their lifestyle easy.

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,with the help of mobile

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they can choose their food and what they want to eat and order as well.

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some pupils are very lazy after they came back from school they use to watch TV and play video games the whole day so they are not preferred to go out and play outdoor activities.

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people are not preferred to do physical exercise like yoga,meditation and so on which creates health issues in their lifestyle.

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my opinion individual are not fit and fine acting in

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present

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no dought old

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peoples are more stronger and active as compared to now.

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should have to hold some

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to make them active and fit.

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