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Traffic jams are a problem for individuals to use roads freely in major cities. What problems does it have for individuals? How individuals can reduce traffic?

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With the development of major cities
traffic
jams
 are becoming trouble almost every city has to confront them.Overpopulation and automobiles are the biggest cause of
this
 disturbing phenomenon and bring inconvenience to citizen's life.
This
 essay will illustrate why
this
 problem persists
as well as
 potential resolutions which individuals could implement. There are numerous reasons why
this
 issue of
traffic
jams
 is growing .
Firstly
traffic
jams
 are caused by too many vehicles on the road.
People
 always give preference to private vehicles
instead
 of public transport. Individuals
use
 their cars, motorcycles or any other vehicle to go to
work
. 
This
 is the main cause of
traffic
jams
 in the morning or evening time.
This
 leads to
people
 always being late to
work
 and less productive, because they waste so many hours on the road when they should
use
 that time in their
work
 to get growth in business.
Although
, there are many solutions that individuals should take to reduce
traffic
 congestion. The most effective way is to
use
 public transport
such
 as buses,trains and the metro. If
people
 commute to their
work
 using buses or trains, there will be an obvious reduction in the number of private cars on the road. Another measure that citizens can take is carpooling.
In addition
 with the help of ,technology lots of things are online, so
people
 can pay their electric, water and other bills online.
For example
, In my ,hometown
people
 pay their bills on their own
instead
 of online due lack of knowledge.
This
 problem leads to increase
traffic
.
To conclude
, There are lots of things that regular
people
 reduce
traffic
jams
. The most important ones are to limit the
use
 of private cars and avoid unnecessary things.
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