The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006.

The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006.
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The table compares the percentage of producing mobile phones among companies in 2005 and 2006.
Overall
, Nokia was the biggest company in the mobile
market
,
while
BenQ Mobile was the least popular manufacturer, with a total per cent 100% in both years. In
the
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2005 year, Nokia and Motorola represented the biggest per cent of the
market
share, 32.5% and 17.7% respectively.
Similarly
, the figures for Samsung accounted for 12.7%,
whereas
LG showed 6.7%. Sony Ericsson company produced 6.3% of mobile phones and BenQ Mobile produced 4.9% with unknown companies constituting 19.2%.
Furthermore
, in 2006, Nokia was the largest producer of smartphones manufacturing 35% of the
market
. The figures for Motorola and Sony Ericsson experienced an increase to 21.1% and 7.4% respectively. In comparison, the percentage of manufacturing of Samsung and LG declined, 11.8% for Samsung and 6.3% for LG. Other unknown manufacturers made up 16.2% of the
market
,
while
BenQ Mobile produced a small minority, only 2.4%.
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