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You are being sent on a one month work assignment in San Francisco, California. You need a place to stay while you are there. Write a letter to the Maury Samson Real Estate Agency. In your letter: explain the situation describe the kind of accommodation you would like provide the dates you will need it Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr Samson, You should write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

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Dear Mr Samson, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to request you to find a place for me for a short time period. I am going to visit San Francisco for the month of
November
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,
due to
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 my work project
that is
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 going to be held in
United
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 States. My company is going to be taken over by one of the American-based companies, but they agreed to keep the old employees and are going to change the working environment as well. I am moving here for a couple of weeks to learn and work on the recent project. I will depart for America on the 1st of
November
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. Because of my official work, I would request you to find a quieter area, which will
also
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 help me to maintain my focus on the assignment. I would be happy to live with a small family
instead
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 of a hotel room under one condition, I am allergic to dogs, so it would be best if there were no dogs. My manager already booked a hotel for my stay for a week and I am thinking of leaving it after the stay because it is located in the busiest area of San Francisco.
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, I need a room from the 8th of
November
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 to the 25th of
November
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. I hope you will consider
this
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 and help me out with
this
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. I look forward to hearing from you a positive response. Yours faithfully, Harpreet Kaur.

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task achievement
Consider adding more specific details about the location preference in San Francisco. This will enhance the clarity of your requirements for the accommodation.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph expresses a single idea more clearly, such as separating the purpose of the visit and accommodation preference for better structure.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and formal tone throughout, making it suitable for a professional request.
coherence cohesion
Uses a clear greeting and closing which helps in maintaining a formal and professional communication structure.
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