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Rich people are getting richer, and poor people are getting poorer. The gap between rich and poor people is widening. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap?

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Nowadays, Our society is experiencing a huge gap between rich and poor
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, and
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 it is increasing. It will create unrest among
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 and can lead to many issues. In
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 ,essay we will discuss potential problems and possible solutions. On the one hand, in every sector, there are a plethora of opportunities for rich
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. They are getting huge respect and power with their money. And the governments, and banks
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 support rich
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 with incentives and loans,
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 they are becoming richer. Wealthy
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 invest in multiple businesses, which is one of the main reasons for their success. They
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 use money power to get favours from the authorities.
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, in the U.K. many studies proved that the richest person's wealth is increasing every year.
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, poor
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 are continuously struggling with financial problems. They are not provided with the necessary opportunities to come out of their poverty. They are not getting proper financial support from the government. And banks
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 not extending loans to poor
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, which forced them to borrow from private finances and get into the loop of repaying the highest interest rates, which is one of the major reasons why poor
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 became poorer.
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 the gap between rich and poor
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 getting increased
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. If it continues
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, the living standards of poor
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 will be declined. They will get involved in crimes to earn money and they will hate rich
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 and the governments, which is not good for any society. In my view, to reduce the gap between rich and poor, governments should educate poor
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 and should provide multiple incentives to come out of poverty. Banks
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 should consider giving loans with fewer interest rates and encourage them to set up small businesses with necessary financial aid.
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