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In some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out bout the history of the house or building they live in

#countries #people #bout #history #house
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 countries, there is an increasing trend with
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 researching information related to the
history
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 of the
place
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 they stay in. It becomes popular and very interesting with the
people
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 who live
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these days.
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 with, there are so many reasons with regard to
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searching
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 the
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 of a
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. One reason is that some
people
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 are in
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belief
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of
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that, the
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 they live in should bring good luck to the
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 who lived there.
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, they start to find out about the yesteryears of the
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. As an example, one of my friends who recently changed their residence informed me that finding out the
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 of their previous
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 they came to know that the previous owner of that property had been suicide inside that
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.
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, they felt it will bring them bad luck when living
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house
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.
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, they sold that
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 and moved to another
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. Another reason is that if we can find out any historical value of the
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 we live in we can sell it for a higher price.
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, my father is like to collect ancient things. Because of ,that he is always trying to buy things with historical value without considering the cost. The best method to research a
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 or a building is to search on the internet. These days we can find any information using websites. Not only that, but
also
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 we can find the
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 of a
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 by asking our elders. To illustrate, my grandfather is 88 years old and if any of our neighbours wanted to find out anything
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 the past they came to meet my grandfather. In conclusion, finding out the
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 of the
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 we live in has positive and negative effects on the
people
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 who live there, as educated
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, we should be able to filter good things. if we can do it,
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history
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 search will be benefited every
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.
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