The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.
The table above describes the information regarding manchester
students
in the year 1937,1967and 2017. Manchester being a renowned university has a steep increase in the total number of
students
enrolling for university and has
also
attracted more
students
from
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overseas. In the early ages, applications were mainly filled by local graduates( 40 miles around the university) which is up to 55 per cent and with few emigrations from international
students
( 6
percent
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the years go by, most of the seats are occupied by overseas
students
( 32 per cent),
while
local
students
declined drastically to 2
pecent
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per cent
. Though
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the total no.of
students
kept rising steeply from 327 to 6254 , the female population increased by 10 per cent,
simultanously
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simultaneously
with the decline in male
students
.
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