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The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.
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The table above describes the information regarding manchester
students
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 in the year 1937,1967and 2017. Manchester being a renowned university has a steep increase in the total number of
students
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 enrolling for university and has
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 attracted more
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overseas. In the early ages, applications were mainly filled by local graduates( 40 miles around the university) which is up to 55 per cent and with few emigrations from international
students
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( 6
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 the years go by, most of the seats are occupied by overseas
students
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 ( 32 per cent),
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 local
students
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 declined drastically to 2
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 the total no.of
students
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 kept rising steeply from 327 to 6254 , the female population increased by 10 per cent,
simultanously
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simultaneously
 with the decline in male
students
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "steep" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • student enrolments
  • university
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • comparison
  • trend
  • change
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • remarkable
  • notable
  • surprising
  • conclusion
  • insights
  • summary
  • overview
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