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Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed material should be used. discuss both views and give your openion.

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Reading is one of the very essential parts of
children
's life. Most people believe reading
books
 should be in a form of online
books
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 others believe in hard copy materials for studying.In my
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 I would support the former's latter point more than the previous one. Because perusing the study documents in form of digital would affect their concentration power
whereas
 avoiding
this
 will improve cognitive thinking in them. On the one hand, toddlers who study
books
 online has serious distraction from concentrating on new learnings. Nowadays online reading materials which come with an application have lots of disturbances like ads pop-ups, gaming advertisements in between screen time and more.
whereas
children
 can get easily distracted by their goal of learning.
For Example
, In recent times covid pandemic, most
children
 spent their studies on mobile phones and computers which resulted in poor achievements on their academic.
On the other hand
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written matter of information can aid
children
 to improve their imaginary skillset. Reading
books
 are associated with our school practices which support the
children
 to enhance their vision by touch and feel of the patterns, and the diagrammatic illusion of the concepts to come up with their own creative ideas.
for example
, in the early days of childhood, stories that are read by the
children
 in their bedtime has a greater impact on them by creating the imaginary and fantasy world for them to enjoy. In conclusion,
although
 the digital form of reading materials has possible side effects on mental health, I strongly agree to support having offline
books
 for studying any information will definitely help them to achieve their analytical thinking.
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