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Some people think that most of the world’s problems are caused by overpopulation. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 believe that too many
people
 could
cause
problems
 around the world. I think that the world’s
problems
 are caused by several aspects, not a single overpopulation aspect. Some government policies would affect the world,
although
 they may have more
people
 than before. The government should release some positive rules to deal with the rising
population
.
For example
, raising
people
's health and environmental awareness and improving public services. The government play a key role in the
population
 increase.
In addition
, everyone’s behaviour could
cause
problems
, and if some
people
 have irresponsible behaviour would create some environmental and social
problems
. Since some
people
 litter randomly and don't get any punishment, it creates waste and pollution
due to
people
’s actions. And
population
 growth increases the demand for products and contributes to economic growth. It could raise the income of the
people
 and improve
people
's standard of living.
On the other hand
, many
people
 would have some
problems
.
First,
from the environmental point of view, if the world
population
 increases, it increases carbon emissions and contributes to global warming.
Therefore
, overpopulation could pose a threat to the environment and affect human life.
Second,
many
people
 could put pressure on some resources.
For example
, it would improve employment competitiveness because many
people
 could compete for the same job, and some
people
 will be treated unfairly. In my view, overpopulation does
cause
 some
problems
, but there are other reasons for some
problems
. We do not neglect the multiple factors which
cause
 the world’s
problems
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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