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These days, in many countries fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this and how can be solved.

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One of the causes for
this
 is that teaching is not a lucrative job, and earnings in teaching are much lower than many others jobs,
as a result
, fewer and fewer graduated
people
 want to be a teacher as it cannot meet their basic needs.
For example
, graduated
people
 can earn twice as much if they work in marketing and advertisement.
In addition
, they have a large range of duties and responsibilities without appreciation or
respect
, because some pupils do not have the same
respect
 for
teachers
 as in the past, or they may disobey the
teachers
. One of the causes for
this
 is that teaching is not a lucrative job, and earnings in teaching are much lower than many others jobs,
as a result
, fewer and fewer graduated
people
 want to be a teacher as it cannot meet their basic needs.
For example
, graduated
people
 can earn twice as much if they work in marketing and advertisement.
In addition
, they have a large range of duties and responsibilities without appreciation or
respect
, because some pupils do not have the same
respect
 for
teachers
 as in the past, or they may disobey the
teachers
. In conclusion, these days, some secondary schools face great difficulties to find a graduate person, who wants to be a teacher because of the low salary, and
also
 discipline problems.
However
, these may be tackled by offering some reward to
teachers
, in order to increase their compensation, and
also
 pupils can be taught the respectful way to behave with their
teachers
 by their parents. A possible solution to tackle
this
 problem is that the government and school management should increase
teachers
’ compensation or offer some advancement opportunities,
such
 as offering loans or scholarships to
teachers
, which can provide a middle-class lifestyle for them or develop
teachers
’ residencies.
Moreover
, parents can play a significant role to address the second problem. They should teach their children how to look up to
teachers
, and
also
 they should set some stricter punishments at home for their children if they do not
respect
 their
teachers
.
For example
, parents can limit their children’s time for watching their
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