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scientist predict that all people will choose to speak the same language

Numerous scientists predict that humans will choose to speak the same International
language
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 in the future. In my opinion,
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 will be a bad development with catastrophic consequences.
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 is because individuals will lose a
part
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 of their
identity
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.
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, many employees who work in the translation sector will have no job anymore. I will now explain my arguments
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 in detail in the forthcoming paragraphs. The first reason is that communities around the world will lose a
part
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 of their culture.
Language
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 is a big
part
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 of a culture and so of the
identity
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 of an individual. People will forget how to speak their native
language
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 because the old generation will not learn the new generation their native
language
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.
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, numerous immigrants forget how to talk in their native
language
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 because they never speak it anymore. Humans will forget a big
part
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 of their
identity
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,
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 if they speak the same
language
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.
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, there are a lot of employees who work in the translation branch. The job of the workers will be completely irrelevant if there will be one International
language
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.
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: many people should apply for a new job if they will be the truth. Proponents of a global
language
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 argue that
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 will prevent misunderstanding. I have to agree with
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 statement.
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, in my opinion
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losing a
part
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 of a culture, and thousands of jobs
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 outweighs
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 argument.
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, having an International
language
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 will have more cons than pros.
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 is because people will lose their
identity
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, and numerous employees will lose their jobs.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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