These days people prefer to watch live performances (shows, concerts) through tv or computer, online rather than go to the place of that event. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today many people prefer watching live shows and concerts at home on
tv
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or computer
instead
of doing it in reality. I agree that
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people watch content at home and
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going to explain that in my essay.
First
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reason is that
it
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comfortable
to
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individual
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because a lot of people can't go to concerts in real life
due to
that many of
that
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events going
in
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other cities or countries.
Also
sometimes even if that event happens in local area tickets
usually
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expensive and
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of them
are
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really small so the only way to watch
show
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the show
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is only by
tv
or computer. In my city
for example
when popular artists like Kairat Nurtas,
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are making a concert tickets usually
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quickly and you need to watch at home.
Second
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reason is cost many individuals can't afford
such
expenses and because of
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they need to watch it on
tv
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TV
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. Prices are big usually and especially for
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stars
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show
however
prices can even double or triple if
concert
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the concert
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will be
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soon.
This
is
ofcourse
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of course
understandable
due to
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of
place
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for
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event
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or other needs of
show
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the show
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. I
belive
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that many individuals get through
this
experience in their
on
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life so they know what
i'm
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talking about. In
conclusion
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I can say that because of reasons that I already noticed in paragraphs above like cost and comfort watching shows on
tv
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TV
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or computer is
common
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a common
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thing in our world today and I
belive
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believe
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that
this
trend will continue in future decades.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • live performance
  • streaming
  • mobility issues
  • busy schedules
  • substantially cheaper
  • broadens cultural horizons
  • customize their environment
  • electric atmosphere
  • social interaction
  • technical issues
  • immersive experience
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