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Q. More and more people are shifting to cities from countryside. Does this have advantages or disadvantages on environment?

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Nowadays, we find numerous
people
 are relocating to
cities
 from villages.
Cities
 are getting a lot more populated bringing in a lot of positives and negatives. In my view,
this
 would have an adverse effect on the
environment
. Here, I will be discussing the cons of
this
. We are observing that a lot of
people
 are getting carried away towards
cities
 from villages.
According to
 me,
this
 will impact the
environment
 in several negative ways
such
 as an increase in
pollution
, population, cost of living etc. When
people
 relocate to the city from the countryside it in turn increases the number of private vehicles on the road which will cause an imbalance in nature by emitting harmful gases into the
environment
. In the earlier paragraph, we saw about air
pollution
.
Similarly
, we encounter noise
pollution
due to
 the masses shifting to urban areas from rural areas. Higher the population chances are more for an increase in noise. Noise
pollution
 will worsen the health conditions of elderly
people
, babies and patients. In my view, relocating to tier
cities
 from the countryside will result in adverse effects on the
environment
 ,
for instance
, an increase in
pollution
.
Hence
, I conclude that shifting from the countryside to
cities
 is not a good thought.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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