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The charts below give information about the electricity generation in two counties in 2009.

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The presented pie charts outline the comparison of the proportion of
energy
generation
 in two European countries in 2009.
Overall
, the most popular type of
energy
generation
 in
Germany
 is conventional thermal,
whereas
France
 preferred to obtain
energy
 from nuclear
sources
.
Additionally
, they used an equal share of
renewables
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sources
, where
Germany
primary
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 received
energy
 from biomass and wind, whilst
France
 in most relied on only hydroelectric
station
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stations
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. Solar
energy
 was used the least in both countries. Looking at the details, capacity in
Germen
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Germany
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 amounts to 560 billion kWh, where conventional thermal and nuclear
sources
 were the most preferred type of
the
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power
generation
 with 59,6% and 23% respectively.
In contrast
,
France
’s capacity is 510 billion kWh, and they used
nuclear
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the nuclear
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station
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stations
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 as the main intake of
energy
 with 76%, and only 10,3% of conventional thermal
energy
, which made it the least popular. In both countries, renewables accounted for averaged
15
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%. In terms of renewables, biomass and wind were the primary
sources
 of receiving
energy
 in
Germany
, with 39,3% and 36,9% in turn, as opposed to
France
 which produced just less than 20% of
energy
 from both
sources
.
However
, the hydroelectric stations are the biggest share in
France
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 renewable electricity
generation
 with 80,5%, compared to
Germany
 which used just
at
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17,7%.
Similarly
, there are the least preferences for solar
generation
 in
Germany
 and
France
, with 6,1% and 0,9% respectively.
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