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We are becoming less influenced by advertising now than in the past. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Advertising has less influence on the number of
consumers
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 in modern society. I believe it is because they are more comfortable with listening to a comment on
products
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 from
friends
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 or family.
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, I think it has a positive impact on our environment since
people
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 can decrease the chance to purchase
products
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.
People
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 tend to follow advice from a close community,
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 as
friends
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 or relatives. It is worth noticing that they rarely trust commercial advertising nowadays. Take my experience as an example, Usually, I would ask for suggestions from
friends
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 rather than an advertisement when I was shopping.
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, there are similar consumer behaviours between my
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 and me. The commercial impact is decreasing its power in the young generation.
People
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 are less to be persuaded by advertisements, in order to attract
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, the industry is more likely to produce high-quality
products
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 with organic ingredients since ESG is a trend in the market. It is a beneficial result for
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 and companies. Fewer non-recycle garbages are being produced. The earth will be recovered within a short time.
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,
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 can take responsibility for our planet.
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 can make a choice to buy any kind of product after they think considerately and carefully. For the reasons mentioned above, word of mouth marketing strategy is more useful than a commercial advertisement at present. I think it has a positive impact on our planet because companies have to think about attractive strategies to increase the intention to purchase,
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 with better quality with natural ingredients.
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