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Some people think studying in groups is better, while some think self-studying is better for school students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is mentioned that gathering many admission as
a
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 association could lead to more effective learning,
while
 the remaining learners disagree that and are concerned studying solitarily could receive a higher quality result.
This
 essay attempts to discuss both sides before giving my own perspectives. On the one hand, learning as a
group
 versus the angle of perspectives. With that image in mind, many ideas from many folks aid enlistment to be more thoughtful,
hence
, the percentage that makes the appropriate decisions will rocket.
In addition
,
students
 can assist the other
students
 when approaching the challenge issues. Not only the questioners can tackle their problems but
also
 the answers can consolidate their knowledge because teaching is twice as learning.
On the other hand
, many
students
 claim that studying in a
group
 could lead to a negative impact on their concentration. That fact that many factors could destroy your ideal learning
environments
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such
 as wasting time for for
waiting
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 other
students
, and gossip, ... To avoid that situation, the most effective way is a self-studying. The benefit of learning by yourself is various, from being proactive in
students
' era, they can learn at any time to easily sink into the deep learning age,
as a result
 to super-efficient studying time.
For example
,
students
 have a tendency to go to the coffee shop for studying
instead
 of learning in a
group
. With a help of white noise, they easily complete all the objectives they have listed recently.
However
, if they learned in a
group
 they would not accomplish half the number of tasks.
To conclude
, both ways of studying: in a
group
 or by their admission have their own benefits impacts or drawbacks. From diversity in ideas but a chaotic environment of
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 studying to be proactive in times of self-studying. As far as I'm concerned, the combination of two ways can reach higher results in studying.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative learning
  • peer interaction
  • cognitive stimulation
  • academic discussion
  • time management
  • personalized learning
  • self-motivation
  • critical thinking
  • resourceful
  • autonomous
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