In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important to people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is positive or negative situation?
In the former decade,
people
tend to rent property due to
comfortable which is why plenty of real estate
was established. Nowadays,Change to a plural noun
estates
people
in several countries are more likely to have a
owning residence than Change the article
an
renting
one. There are many advantages Wrong verb form
rent
that
why Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
should buy a home but there are still have
some drawbacks as well.
First of all, the main reason that Unnecessary verb
apply
people
decide to have their own accomodations
is that Correct your spelling
accommodations
accommodation
rented
house can not provide Correct article usage
a rented
a
mental stability. Remove the article
apply
For example
, basically
every rented Add a comma
,basically
estrates
have Correct your spelling
estates
thier
own rental contract, which Correct your spelling
their
mean
if Change the verb form
means
this
contract has expired, they would have a chance to move to other spot
. Change the wording
another spot
other spots
Moreover
, another mian
factor Correct your spelling
main
is
that Unnecessary verb
apply
people
do not rent a home is a
limited freedom. Because buying a property can give much more privacy than a rental home. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, people
who is
Change the verb form
are
a
house owner has Correct article usage
apply
Correct article usage
the fully
fully
right to decorate, renovate or refurbish their house as much as they Replace the word
full
decired
.
Correct your spelling
desire
On the other hand
, building or purchasing a property is catagorized
as a huge decision Correct your spelling
categorized
becasue
sometimes it probably uses almost a Correct your spelling
because
wholelife
savings, Correct your spelling
whole life
whole-life
thus
it is really risky that many people
do not prepare thier
money for Correct your spelling
their
such
an ugent
matters like an accident or a sudden illness. Correct your spelling
urgent
agent
Besides
, most people
plan just only shot-term
finances. Correct your spelling
short-term
Therfore
, they might be bankrupted by a housing loan.
Correct your spelling
Therefore
To conclude
, from my pint
of view, owning a place Correct your spelling
point
offer
a lot of benefits Change the form of the verb
offers
such
as privacy or worried-free but there also
has disadvantages like money problems. So, being well-organized and well-manage finances is the best way to diminish all these disadvantagesSubmitted by jeanbabyfrog on
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