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Some people think that having people from different nationalities and culture background to a country get a faster development. To what extend do you agree??

#people #nationalities #culture #background #country #development
Globalization has benefitted the world
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 various domains and opened up the doors for the nationals to learn and implement new advancements and techniques from immigrants. Analysing the benefits of having
multi national
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multi-national
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work force
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workforce
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 in businesses of a
country
i
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 come across an idea which fully supports the argument of having international specialists for enormous development. Undoubtedly, a
country
 which is having
an immigrants
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immigrants
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specialized
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on
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 different trades can make a
far reaching
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 impact
upon
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 the
advacnement
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advancement
 of that
country
.
For instance
, countries like Malaysia and UAE where people with particular
skills
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 sets are providing their services and contributing
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 the
developement
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development
 of that
country
.
In addition
, developed countries heavily
invests
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on
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 technologies and
providing
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 specialised
tranining
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training
 in fields which are widely in demand
such
 as
,
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 Computer technology, Engineering, Architectural development, and
in
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music and arts to boost
country's
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the country's
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 export and generate
reveneue
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revenue
 in
terms
 of remittances.
On the contrary
, if a nation isolates
himself
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itself
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 and
avoid
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the
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interaction
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 the world in
terms
 of science, technology, arts and culture it will be having a
far reaching
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 dent
upon
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 the future of that
country
 and will be having severe
impedements
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impediments
impediment
 in
terms
 of
nation's
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the nation's
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 advancements.
For example
, countries like Afghanistan and North
korea
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Korea
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 are heavily impacted in
terms
 of advancement in technology
due to
non welcoming
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 policies
thus
 bearing the fruits of it. Now to mitigate
this
 perception they will have to take
confidence building
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 measures to get support from
international
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the international
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 community. In conclusion, Hiring immigrants to do specialised work will produce a
far reaching
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far-reaching
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 impact in
terms
 of
country's
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the country's
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developemnt
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development
 as compared to do investments in acquiring specialised knowledge and skills.
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