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Developed countries have created many environmental problems in the World, particularly in their contribution to global warming. Why is global warming a problem? What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming?

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Industrialized countries have been facing enormous environmental problems, specifically in their involvement in temperature change causing a critical condition in the world. In
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 essay, I will outline reasons we must consider global warming and suggest a viable solution to reduce
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 threatening
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 phenomenon, followed by a reasoned conclusion. First and foremost, Global warming is responsible for not only shrinking ice caps albeit
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 for a surge in extreme weather
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 resulting in heat waves, forest fires, and droughts.
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, the key impact of overheating in wildlife is habitat disruption, in which ecosystems-places where animals have spent millions of years adapting-rapidly transform in response to
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 change, reducing their ability to fulfil the species' needs.
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, researchers agree that even small changes in temperature are enough to threaten hundreds of already struggling animals.
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, the polar bear standing on a chunk of shrinking ice, apparently stranded, has become a familiar image, a symbol of the devastating effects of
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 change. The required changes span technologies, behaviours, and policies that encourage less waste and smarter use of our resources. To illustrate, improvements to energy efficiency and vehicle fuel economy, increases in wind and solar power, biofuels from organic waste, setting a price on carbon, and protection are all potent ways to reduce the amount of carbon dioxide and other gases trapping heat on the planet.
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, changes in
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 and temperature has generated several serious consequences for both animal and the environment. These dangers can be addressed by replacing traditional energy and introducing environmentally-friendly policies for sustainable development.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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