Many people today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to make people feel safer?

#people #home

Nowadays, the majority of

people

can be

worry

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all the time

with

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about

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their safety neither at their own place nor outside. The growth of

criminality

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the criminality

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rate and natural

disaster

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disasters

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are the two main

reason

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reasons

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for

this

situation

Firstly

, the news on television and

newspaper

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in newspaper

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are always talking about how cruel

people

can be to others

such

the

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robbery,

rape

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and rape

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. and homicide. The person who did it

not

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is not

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only some strangers but

also

could be related families or friends.

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, in

the

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public transportation like

bus

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buses

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train

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trains

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, it is often

people

lost their

wallet

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wallets

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or phone and they did not notice how it can

happened

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happen

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In addition

, in some

case

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cases

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, children can murder their parents because they did not

allowed

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allow

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him/her to buy things that he/she asks

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for.

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Thus

, to solve that, the

goverment

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government

should provide

the

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access

for

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work and low-cost or free education to the community. The lack of activity and money are the reasons why

people

choose to do

the

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bad things to other

people

Secondly

, some natural

disaster

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disasters

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occur in many

nation

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nations

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such

tsunami

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tsunamis

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earthquake

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earthquakes

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flood

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floods

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, and volcanic

eruption

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eruptions

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For instance

, a few weeks ago, Turkey and

Syiria

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Syria

had earthquake disasters and

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they

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happened at night time when

mostly

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most

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people

are

sleep

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sleeping

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. The impact are many buildings destroyed and it

cause

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causes

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thousand

people

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of people

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died

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to die

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and

injured

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be injured

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badly.

Furthermore

, to control the

situation

government and society need to prevent the

situation

with

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controlling

the

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land use,

such

people

forbid to live in

the

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risk area of

tsunami

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a tsunami

the tsunami

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or volcanic mountain,

then

government

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the government

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need to control the standard of building construction so when the disaster

happen

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happens

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, people,

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people

are still feel

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still feel

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safe at home. In conclusion, the unlucky

situation

could

be happen

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happen

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anytime and anywhere but with

the

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preventing

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preventive

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action and monitoring regularly from the country and the

people

, we still can reduce the

affect

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effect

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