according to an international travel magazine, many tourists today fly straight to their holiday resort and almost never leave it. Unlike tourists in the 1960s and 70s they return home with no experience of local culture. Why do you think this happens? How was tourism different in the past?

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Presently, abroad trips have increased. Many visitors went to their celebrations resort and most of them don’t come back. On the other ,hand it was completely different in the past
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because they came back without any experience and traditional habits. I fancy on argue about
this
and
also
declare own opinion about
this
statement. As can be observed, nowadays the international travel industry become at a high level. And most
people
tend to travel for a long
time
. Because they want to visit all parts of place carefully and make the enjoyable moment.
For instance
, in 2021
one
I went to Istanbul to meet my dear brother and
also
have an amusing journey. We decided to stay here for
one
week. Because we feel we need
this
long
time
to get around all city.
Moreover
, our parents travelled for a few days. And they could not give any information about
this
zone and
also
have joy
time
. Because they only stay here for
one
or two days. And actually, they were against long trips.
For example
,
one
Iranian organization claimed in 2000 about the period of
time
in which travellers stay in different areas only for short
time
. from my point of view, the main reason for
this
big change is
people
's mindset . As we know the evolution of
time
can transfer things
such
as
people
's opinions.
People
think that if they increase their period of travel they can have more useful and beautiful trips.
Overall
,
this
change can be the biggest event in mankind's era. And
also
so useful and efficient in
people
's lifestyles.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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