In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this a positive or negative situation?

In some societies and regions around the world, people appreciate buying houses
instead
of renting homes and
this
idea varies from
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country to another one. In
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we will check and discuss the cultural and financial reasons behind
this
idea and I will give my opinion about
this
situation. In some countries especially in the middle east and Asia, owning a home is a symbol of status and its roots back to difficult
economical
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situations and instability in the housing and rental market because of burning inflations.
for example
in these regions rent prices
varies
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rapidly and constantly
gets
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high so
as a
result
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people prefer to not reside in a rental property and
instead
buy their own
house
. another reason for
this
desire is financial aid, because, when you own a
house
, you can rent out a room or even
basement
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for additional generation of passive income and
this
is very beneficial, especially in mentioned regions. The third reason is
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of
protecting
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laws for tenants and corruption in justice departments.
therefore
tenants
doesn’t
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feel secure and safe
to
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rent a
house
in long term. To move on, I believe strongly owning a home has several benefits.
For instance
, in long term,
houses
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prices
goes
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up gradually and it will be very profitable.
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you are able to fully and
indepentdly
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independently
decorate, modify and make any changes, at any time without hesitation and permission from the
land lord
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landlord
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.
thirdly
the satisfaction of owning a
house
could raise
self confidence
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and
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helpful
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for mental health.
To conclude
, from my perspective, owning a home considerably outweighs
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residing in a rental property.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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