Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

Compared with the past, the number of illness and
medicines
have increased all over the world. Some people try to use
medicines
instead
of visiting a
doctor
. I completely disagree with
this
view.
Firstly
, the most disadvantage of replacing
medicines
and treatments by visiting a
doctor
is the wrong diagnosis which means you have a headache and you google your pain and it shows you some results and information and suggests you take a pill without asking you more questions or feeling.
Therefore
, it can't be exactly recognized. If you go to a
doctor
and say what's your problem,
as a result
, a
doctor
asks you more questions and checks your body
such
as the rate of your heart or your temperature and after that recognized and gives you
medicines
. Because, somebody's pain it's not about the body, it's a mentality and no one can't understand except a
doctor
.
For example
, when I wanted to come to Canada, I had stress and tooth pain and couldn't eat and drink water. I googled it and suggested me some medicals when I went to a
doctor
, she said my teeth were well and it was just mentality and when you pass
this
situation, it will be good and it happened to me.
On the other hand
, some people believe that the price of visiting a
doctor
is expensive and we can find our problems on the internet for free. For some illnesses
such
as getting a cold, you can take a pill
such
as an adult cold or take care of yourself.
However
, it's better to go to a
doctor
for better visits and suggest a pill to make you well quickly. In conclusion, taking
medicines
without visiting a
doctor
can be harmful.
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