some teachers says international student exchange program would be beneficial for all teenage school students. do you think its adVAntage will outweigh the disadvantage.
A number of tutors have the idea that if the pupils exchange between some countries there are several merits for all adolescent school
students
. in this
essay, we want to discuss the positive and negative points of this
view.
on the one hand, many commentators justifiably argues
that there are some advantages to exchange Change the verb form
argue
students
. from this
point of view, they believe that this
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students
. on
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each international pupils have a specific experience from their region and they can share it with other Add a comma
,words
students
. for example
, a student from china is able to explain to other students
their culture or the amazing place in their country if he studies in the US. however
, I don't find this
argument valid because all students
find it easy through
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to
from
the web.
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apply
on the other hand
, there are those who subscribe to the view that the exchange international students
are not beneficial to all students
. firstly
, ,
usually international Change the punctuation
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students
immigrate without family, so there is a threat to them. from an educational viewpoint, there are several psychological problems for students
who are far away from their families. such
as,
the amount of stress rising significantly among them. Remove the comma
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moreover
, they are able to bring several ugly cultures into a new countries
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a new country
new countries
so that
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I
strongly disagree its positive aspects are noticeable.
in conclusion, Correct word choice
so I
although
there are some merits to exchanging international students
for all adolescents, the negative of
points are far more as far from family and some threats in Change preposition
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a new
the new
region
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