the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The graph illustrates the volume of
the
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island
visiting tourists who stayed on cruise ships and stayed on the island
from 2010 to 2017. The unit is measured in millions of visitors
.
Overall
, the number
of visitors
who were travelling on the island
fluctuated meanwhile people who were travelling on cruise ships rose with some fluctuations. However
, the total number
of travellers experienced a remarkable increase over the period of time
.
The sum of visitors
was 1 million
at the beginning and steadily increased to 1.5 million
in 2012.
Three years ago, the total number
of visitors
plumed to around 2.75 million
and finally
, reached the highest point at 3.5 million
in 2017.
Regarding the number
of people who were spending time
on the island
, at the beginning of the time
, they were around 0.75 million
then
stayed constant until the end of the year 2011. After that, the number
of travellers sharply increased to 1.5 million
in 2013, dropped to roughly 0.25 million
in 2016 and went up to 1.5 million
at the end
of the period.
Whereas
, the volume of people who were spending time
on cruise ships was around 0.25 million
in 2010 then
grew to 0.5 million
in 2011 and hit the floor of approximately 0.25 million
in the year 2012. Moreover
, in 2016, the number
of visitors
dramatically increased to 1.5 million
and reached a peak of 2 million
throughout the period of time
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