It is impressive for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

Currently, most
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people
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think that it is vital for individuals to take danger of their professional
lives
and
also
private
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lives
. If
people
have to establish
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themselves in
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work
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or study segment , they have to take some
risks
. It has some demerits but the merits of taking
risks
can outweigh the drawbacks. Most of the renowned public take
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risk
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to achieve their own name
such
as
by
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hard work and by uncertainty.
To begin
with, scientists can not do anything at once . They are trying at end of gaining success.
For example
, Tomas Edison
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tried hard and soul to invent
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bulb and he have to take some
risks
to make it
as well as
after taking
risks
he achieved her goal .
Secondly
, the student
do
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not know about their future.
Moreover
, they are continuing their studies to reach their destination. In that
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they are facing lots of failures moments and danger
also
but never stop to take
risks
.
For instance
, students who want to be a doctor,
they
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have to give lots of
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which are not easy and they may be failed but get up once again without thinking
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insecurity. At the
last
moment that student will get
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a doctor
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.
However
, we can see that
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people
take various types of
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in
personal
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their personal
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lives
as well as
occupation
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lives
. Whatever, it has some disadvantages too. First of all,
people
may face
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the economical
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problem
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problems
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for taking danger in their
profession
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lives
.
For instance
,
the
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businessmen
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will take
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a loan
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loan
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loans
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from
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a bank
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bank
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banks
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,
if
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he will face a great loss
then
he
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they
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may
be get
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bankruptcy.
Besides
, the person's unsuccess not only give depression that person but
also
affect their family members.
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, the unsuccessful
person'
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s family have to lead a poor life of uncertain steps. But my point of view is that
,
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despite the problem of taking
risks
the individuals may lose but
end
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the end
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of the day they will shine in their private and
profession
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life. In conclusion,
for
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taking
risks
people
might face economical and personal problems but they can try again that work and become
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a success
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success
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. So I agree with
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statement. My opinion is that the advantages of taking
risks
can meet up the disadvantages.
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