Shihab The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

Shihab The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
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The diagram illustrates the various stages of brick Production for the architecture.
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, the process consists of 7 stages, beginning with clay in the ground and ending up with newly-made
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being delivered to a customer. First of all, a digger extracts a large amount of clay from a pit in the ground. Using a metal grid and a roller system, big chunks of clay are sorted and broken down into smaller pieces, which are
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mixed with sand and water. Once
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done, the mixture is formed into the correct shapes with either a mold or a wire cutter.
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, the
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spend one to two days drying off in an oven before being moved through a series of very hot kilns: the first one bakes the
bricks
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at temperatures between 200 and 980ºC, and the second is even hotter, at 870 to 1300ºC. The longest step so far comes next: the
bricks
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go through a two-to-three-day cooling process before they can
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be packed onto skids and delivered to wherever they’re needed.
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