You live near a public school. The school asked local residents to help maintain the school building and playground ground. Write a letter to the principal i

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Dear sir, I would like to inform

that

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you that

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was

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personally know about the

school

and the ñearby. I like to

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be intrested

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intrested

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interested

to help

for

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with

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the

school

and playground. I like to

interested

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be interested

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to help the

school

for

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with

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the

maintainance

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maintenance

. My children

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studying in

this

school

and I

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tolike

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improve the

school

building and increase the playground. I am staying near to the

school

. I plan to intact new beautiful gardens near to the play area.. we can show up to the beautiful scenery near

from

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the garden. I am working in a hospital as a nurse

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I can get

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some

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some

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free time I will come and

planted

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plant

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new plants and

watering

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water

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the plants. I am available

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on inthe

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inthe

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the

weekends during my leave.

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and my family come and help during that time. Thanking you, Yours faithfully, Fina Rosmin.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

140 words

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