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You live near a public school. The school asked local residents to help maintain the school building and playground ground. Write a letter to the principal i

#school #residents #playground #ground
Dear sir, I would like to inform
that
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was
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personally know about the
school
 and the ñearby. I like to
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be intrested
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intrested
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interested
 to help
for
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with
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 the
school
 and playground. I like to
interested
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be interested
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 to help the
school
for
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with
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 the
maintainance
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maintenance
. My children
is
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 studying in
this
school
 and I
like
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 improve the
school
 building and increase the playground. I am staying near to the
school
 . I plan to intact new beautiful gardens near to the play area.. we can show up to the beautiful scenery near
from
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the garden. I am working in a hospital as a nurse
,
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if
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and if
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 I can get
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some
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a
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some
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 free time I will come and
planted
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plant
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 new plants and
watering
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water
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 the plants. I am available
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on inthe
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inthe
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the
 weekends during my leave.
Me
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 and my family come and help during that time. Thanking you, Yours faithfully, Fina Rosmin.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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