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An increasing number of people choose to live in big cities. what problems will this brings, how should the government encourage

#people #cities #government
It has been argued by many individuals that in
this
 modern era, the majority of
people
 are shifting to urban
areas
 for better facilities and jobs.
This
 essay shall shed light upon the various
problems
 related to
this
 situation
along with
 some ways to address
this
 issue. Foremost, the prominent obstacle faced by
cities
 because of migration is that it
create
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creates
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 housing
problems
. If
people
 move to metropolitan
areas
, they would suffer from
lack
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a lack
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 of accommodation with
this
 builders build houses for those
people
 who love to reside in
develop
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developed
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areas
. So they clear land and it will create deforestation hurdles.
Besides
this
, it
also
increase
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increases
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 pollution. when
people
 choose to live in big
cities
, the quality of air would decrease because
people
 more
uses
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use
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of
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apply
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private vehicles rather than public transport which
emit
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emits
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the
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apply
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toxic gasses.
For example
, a survey conducted by Harward University revealed that 90% of
people
 are not only facing housing
problems
 but
also
 pollution.
Hence
, it puts
adverse
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an adverse
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affect
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effect
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 on
countries
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countries'
country's
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 development. Despite the
above mentioned
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above-mentioned
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 issues, there is a solution. The main
mitigatting
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mitigating
 factor is that government need to provide job opportunities in
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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. Once higher authorities give occupations to citizens of villages, they could never shift to
cities
 as they may earn money in their
areas
 without going anywhere.
For instance
, it is published article by The Tribune newspaper showed that
,
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apply
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 in
India
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,India
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 statutory
body
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bodies
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 gave job facilities to
people
 of undeveloped
areas
 with the help of
this
enviornment
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environment
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to protect
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protect
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protection
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from
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themselves from
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 bad air quality and
also
 deforestation.
Therefore
, it is fruitful for
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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.
To conclude
,
although
 there are
few
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a few
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problems
 when commoners move
in
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to
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 the big
cities
first
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,first
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 of all, it
enchance
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enhance
enhances
 problem
of
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with
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 housing and
save
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saving
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 from harmful gasses, the council need to provide amenities
of
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for
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 occupation.
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