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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The changes which occurred to the physical layout of a bookstore since 2000 are portrayed in the given maps.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 there have been significant alterations in the store for the introduction of a Cafe and a reading
area
. In 2000, the bookstore was a square-shaped building with its entrance at the West. The service desk was there towards its extreme right, crossing the sections for travel and new
books
. Most areas of the store were occupied by
books
 on fiction: in the North and towards the North-east. Non-fiction
books
 were arranged to the South, towards the East of the service desk. At the centre, there were
books
 on cookery, hobbies and art. The first major change as a part of the re-arrangement is seen at the centre
,
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 when the
area
 is seen cleared for reading. The
area
 for fiction at North is seen shrunken by a quarter of its previous size.
Books
 on art, cookery and hobbies occupied the other three portions. The
area
 in the northeast, where fiction
books
 were there in 2000, is seen occupied by non-fiction
books
 now. At the place where the non-fiction
books
 were seen, a café came into existence.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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