The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).
The tables
provides
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information about the number of people that went abroad in four different
years
.
Overall
, international travel became popular over the
years
. Comparing the five parts of the world,
whereas
Europe was the
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favorable
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destinations
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,
Middle
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East was the least.
Furthermore
, America was the only place that saw a decrease in 2005. The most visited areas
along
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the
years
were Europe, Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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. Europe almost doubled their numbers of visitors in 15
years
spam from 280,2
million
to 400,2
million
, followed by Asia and Pacific
that
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also
had a significant increase to 135,8
millions
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million
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in 2005 when they were just 60,2
million
in 1990. The two least visited parts,
African
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and
Middle
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the Middle
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East
also
had a rise in international travelling,
however
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the numbers
where
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were
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not that significant. Between 1995 and 2000 America had
a
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increase of more than 6
million
, but
unfortunately
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this
number
had
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fell
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in the following 5
years
from 118, 2 to 112,2
million
.
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  • significant increase
  • international travel
  • popular destinations
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • ease of travel
  • cultural exchange
  • globalization
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • millions of travelers
  • annual growth rate
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