The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).

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provides

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information about the number of people that went abroad in four different

years

Overall

, international travel became popular over the

years

. Comparing the five parts of the world,

whereas

Europe was the

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favorable

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destinations

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Middle

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East was the least.

Furthermore

, America was the only place that saw a decrease in 2005. The most visited areas

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the

years

were Europe, Asia and the

pacific

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. Europe almost doubled their numbers of visitors in 15

years

spam from 280,2

million

to 400,2

million

, followed by Asia and Pacific

that

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also

had a significant increase to 135,8

millions

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in 2005 when they were just 60,2

million

in 1990. The two least visited parts,

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and

Middle

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East

also

had a rise in international travelling,

however

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the numbers

where

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not that significant. Between 1995 and 2000 America had

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increase of more than 6

million

, but

unfortunately

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this

number

had

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fell

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in the following 5

years

from 118, 2 to 112,2

million

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