Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

In
this
modern era, many
people
believe that the extinction of some species of plants and
animals
is the main problem for the human environment,
while
others say that there are more important environmental matters. I agree with the latter opinion and
this
essay will discuss both views. To start with, there are two compelling reasons why
people
believe that the loss of flora and fauna is a paramount environmental problem.
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reason is that since most
people
on earth are multicultural and they eat different types of food that come from
animals
and greeneries, preserving both flora and fauna is paramount for human survival.
For instance
, in eastern areas of
Indonesia
such
as Papua, for many centuries most individuals have been conserving
one
specific plant which is famously known as
sagoo
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sago
as their main food resource to survive
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because rice is expensive and cannot be planted in that area. The second reason is that the existence of particular species of
animals
is significant for country icons. Orangutans are known as
one
of the endangered
animals
in
Indonesia
, and their presence is
one
of the most iconic of
Indonesia
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to attract a lot of tourists.
Therefore
, if orangutans are extinct,
Indonesia
will lose
one
of their icons, and the number of tourists might decrease. In stark contrast, I believe that other environmental problems
such
as
waste
and air
pollution
are more vital.
Firstly
, the enormous amount of
waste
in all
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countries can spread many
diseases
to our
surrounding
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.
Diseases
such
as skin infection, tetanus, and malaria are deadly
diseases
that are caused by the accumulation of
waste
that
are
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not handled properly. If the government and
people
do not put their concern into solving
waste
problems, these
diseases
will be spreading and
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many
people
all over the world.
Secondly
, air
pollution
is a crucial problem because it can
cause
greenhouse
gasses
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, which can negatively affect our environment. Pollutants
cause
an immense amount of carbon to be gathered in the earth's atmosphere,
this
chemical reaction blocks the heat radiation from our planets to come out from the atmosphere.
Hence
,
this
phenomenon can
cause
the earth to become hotter, and
subsequently
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it can melt the ice in Antarctica, which can
cause
big floods in the world. In conclusion,
although
many individuals believe that protecting flora and fauna is important for human survival and
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iconic symbols, I argue that
waste
and
pollution
environmental problems are more important since they can
cause
many
diseases
and greenhouse gasses. Given
this
situation, the government should put more focus on handling the
waste
treatment and making some regulations to reduce air
pollution
such
as limiting the number of vehicles on the road.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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