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The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 200 and projecting for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 200 and projecting for 2050.
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A glance at the two charts provided reveals the proportion of
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the populations
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populations
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population
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 of
Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000 and some
prediction
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predictions
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in
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about
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number
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a number
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 of
people
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 in both
countris
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countries
 in 2050.
According to
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 the charts,the percentage of
people
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 who were between 15 and 59 years in
Yemen
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 and
italy
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Italy
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were
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was
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 46.3% and 61.6% respectively in 2000.
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 the percentage of
young
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the young
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 generation between 0 and 14 in Yeman was 3 times bigger than that in Italy during 2000.
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,
proportion
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the proportion
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 of elderly
people
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 in Italy was considerably greater than that in
Yemen
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.
On the other hand
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,as it is clear,the number of moderate
people
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 between 15
and59
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and 59
 will increase in both countries in 2050 more than
other
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in other
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 groups.
In addition
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,the
percentages
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percentage
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 of children in
Yemen
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 will rise about 3 times bigger with 37% than children in
italy
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Italy
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with
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at
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 11.5% in 2050.Another
further
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 point that
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is highlighted
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 by the figures is that
,
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apply
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we will experience
dramaticaly
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dramatically
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 differences in the number of
people
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 more than 60 years in 2050 in both nations and
this
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 amount will exponentially jump in Italy with 42.3%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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