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'Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.' To what extent to you agree or disagree with the statement?

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In recent years,computer games are becoming the favourite leisure activity among youngsters.Some individuals believe that it is a waste of time.I totally agree with
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 statement because
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 has a harmful impact on children’s health
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, the young generation will spend major time with visual display screens
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 of learning On the one hand,nowadays humans can not imagine their life without technologies like phones,computers and pads.
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, plenty of use of
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 devices leads to serious troubles not only for children but even for adults.When teenagers spend a large time in front of computers they have headaches, eye diseases and attachment to virtual life.
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,in 2021 the number of children with lesser vision reached 2000 in Uzbekistan
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 playing video games and watching TV over a short distance.
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, youngsters should focus on learning and studying.
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,
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 type of leisure activity distracts from studies and deprives hours.As consequence, they lose interest in learning and self-developing.
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, it is proved that games-addicted people manifest weak social skills and suffer from a lack of communication.
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, if children use computers correctly under parental control,
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 they can condense into other things too.
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, in the modern era video games have a significant role in kid's life.I think that
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 may cause various health issues,
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 it interrupting their interest in getting knowledge
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