In some cultures, childrens are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

nowadays , there are a variety of cultures which encourage
children
to try hard
due to
achieve everything they want. in
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I discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
this
method. achieving everything has one condition, you should try hard. if
children
accept
this
sentence they will try more and more because motivation increased in their life. increasing their attempts and motivation
cause
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they reach their dreams plus goals and everything they love
as a result
they can work in a position that has been wanted since
children
.
moreover
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they understand
patience
in their life because they know that achieving their aims or dreams does not happen overnight and they must try more than usual for years ,
therefore
they practice
patience
and avoid rushing. For ,example
according to
Oxford ,University there is a direct connection between
patience
and bringing off to aim.their statistics are shown that people who are patient and
also
try hard can achieve everything rather than others. on the other ,hand
this
thinking has some disadvantages. wrong thinking arises in minds of
children
who accept
this
theory. they think that only their efforts are effective to gain anything and ignore the rest of the other factors
as a consequence
cannot carry off their dreams and get depressed. they should understand that their effort is one factor among thousands of factors to succeed and if they struggle hard they may arrive at everything.,
furthermore
a false self-confidence is created in them. they misunderstand their ability and will get everything to chance except their effort , so going to the wrong way in life and waste it.for ,instance my friend made an effort to play basketball but he wasn't tall. he thought everything is tried,
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but unfortunately
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unfortunately
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he could not get success after ten years and wasted his youth. in ,conclusion increasing motivation and
patience
among
children
are two advantages of
this
method and wrong thinking and
also
false self-confidence is two disadvantages of
this
advice.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inspiration
  • motivation
  • work ethic
  • resilience
  • self-confidence
  • self-worth
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • frustration
  • self-esteem
  • pressure
  • anxiety
  • individual effort
  • collaboration
  • social support
  • systemic factors
  • talent
  • opportunity
  • luck
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