IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

Some people claim that not enough waste from homes is recycled and that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #waste #homes #governments #requirement
The view held by some is that the authorities should impose new laws to legally demand households to send more items into recycling bins.
This
 essay will argue that
this
 may not be the best solution to the garbage problem.
Firstly
, it is very unclear how tracking who properly gets rid of unnecessary household things should be done. Conducting research to figure out the best approach would require investing an enormous amount of funds. In fact, there have been cases in the past when costly studies did not discover efficient technologies to find solutions to environmental issues.
Thus
, one disadvantage is the potential risk of losing
millions
Add the preposition
ofmillions
show examples
 dollars that came from the population's taxes.
Secondly
, a possible way to watch who does proper waste utilization would imply installing cameras and other artificial intelligence sensors on top of or around the recycle bins.
Such
 detailed tracking will be way too intimidating for some citizens and that might lead to an
overall
 decrease in society's mental health.
For example
, someone would be constantly feeling irritated from being watched over through the devices and,
as a consequence
, she or he might develop depression. To summarize, in my
opinion
Add the comma(s)
,opinion
show examples
 the increased mind control causing paranoia combined with the number of resources needed in order to invent a system that collects personal recycling data does not make it viable to implement legal rules regarding items' clearance.
Submitted by ankudinovayekater on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: