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Should governments make decisions about people’s lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

#governments #decisions #people’s #lifestyle #people
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There is an ongoing debate about whether governments should decide about
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people
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’s lifestyles and habits. Supporters of
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 stance argue that
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 would effectively take the burden off certain public sector
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, like NHS, improving the well-being of the whole society.
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, in my ,view
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 would only damage citizens’
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 to privacy and breach the rule of
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.
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, the government should respect
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people
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’s
right
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 to private life. Everybody lives
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 to their views and likes, with which others may disagree.
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,
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 variety makes our culture stand out and a platform for different worldviews.
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, as far as
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 respect each other’s opinions, the state should not take them under concern. Yet, if someone
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 starts to harm others, public institutions ought to act and combat aggressive behaviours. Take,
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, Adolf Hitler’s stance on Jews. If the Weimar Republic took action earlier, perhaps the holocaust would never have happened. It should be
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 underlined that the state does not have the competency to take interest in our lifestyle. The current political system prohibits the legislature to pass a
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 that would try to shape
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people
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’s behaviour or custom. Nowadays, lawmakers are only entitled to devise a
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 that bans certain activities in society.
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, everything
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 not enshrined in the statutes is legal. To illustrate
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, the government cannot produce a
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 that would force
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 to play basketball but
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 bans certain activities that may harm players on the field. If the government were to order
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 to take on certain habits, it would be a breach of
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. Some could raise the argument that the state should have competencies to shape
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people
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’s lifestyles, as there are public
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, which could benefit from it.
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 only half true. Public administration should encourage
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 to change their habits to make the public
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 sector more efficient, yet not force them to do so.
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, governments should not have a
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 to tell
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 what to do, as
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 would be a clear violation of the rule of
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 and
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people
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’s
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 to privacy.
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 some may argue that it would have beneficial effects on public sector
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, it should not underestimate the freedom of society as a whole.
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