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LANGUAGE 1.Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Many
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 have disappeared from the world. It is commonly believed
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 not a significant issue to worry about and
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 can contribute to having an easier life. Personally, I believe that
languages
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 are essential for the diversity of cultures.
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 with, one clear reason why some
people
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 support
this
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 idea is that having fewer
languages
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 can help
people
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 from different nationalities communicate with each other without a
language
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 barrier.
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, some
people
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 find communicating with a new
language
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 challenging, as it requires time and patience to master, so having one
language
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 can ease the process.
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, a study conducted by the University of Liverpool found that students who study in international schools are less likely to extend their social cycle, because of the variety of
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 among the students.
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, having a few
languages
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 can strengthen the connection between
people
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 around the world. Another point to consider is limiting the number of
languages
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 can affect the diversity of cultures. It is
also
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 possible to say that each culture has a unique
language
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 that impacts
people
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's behaviour, which inspires them to create their own clothes, music, dances and more.
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, many countries have their traditional songs
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 as
,
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 the National Anthem that include words from the
language
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 of the country, which makes it different from other anthems. In conclusion,
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 there are convincing arguments on both sides, I believe that many
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 for many reasons, like protecting the history of the countries and making communication between
people
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 much easier.

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Check for grammar mistakes and sentence structures to improve clarity.
task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument, which is good for task response.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction clearly states your opinion, which is a good start.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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