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Scientists predict that all people will choose to talk the same global language in the future. Do you think that this a positive or negative developmen?

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The role of language in
this
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 present world is inescapable. Many scientists are predicting that individuals will choose the same type of language for communication in the future. I agree with the given statement. On the
unitary
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other

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 hand, a variety of languages are available around the globe. Natives can effortlessly speak their native tongue
that is
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 to say that the traditional way of talking is more convenient but
due to
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 the easy accessibility of the internet residents are
doing
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apply

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communication
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communicating

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 with foreign societies because several platforms are providing opportunities to freely speak internationally.
For example
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, Oxford
university
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University

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 in the USA revealed that more than two-fifths of inhabitants are using the
internet
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Internet

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 and they are trying to understand other territories' languages.
Thus
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, the international tongue is becoming more and more popular.
On the other hand
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, the fact cannot be denied that some individuals are enjoying to speak their mother tongue because it is easier than a new expression. To
explicate
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explain

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 it, some people are
shifting
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moving

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 to other countries. It is crucial for these people to learn a new voice. But some people do not like to read or write in other languages.
For instance
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, more than a quarter of natives can properly speak their local speaking style, but local voices
are
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have

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becoming
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become

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 more unpopular in recent years.
As a result
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, society cannot speak their traditional accent.
To conclude
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, unquestionably, a large number of residents are shifting to these voices. Some students are going to international colleges for study purposes and very
fewer
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few

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 natives can speak their mother voice.

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