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The topic of this: Currently, most students are studying only mathematics and the world language, English. What do you think its advantages more than its disadvantages?

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In some countries, many
students
 learn math and
English
 because some people believe the
study
 of these sciences plays a vital role in human life, despite the fact that there are other
subjects
. In general, people think that there are advantages and disadvantages to studying only these disciplines. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both the positive sides and negative sides of
this
 in two paragraphs. First and foremost, studying abroad, especially in the United States, is becoming everyone's dream at present because there are a lot of universities that stand in the top 10 places there.
Students
 who graduated from these universities are offered jobs by very large companies for high salaries.
Therefore
, someone who wants to
study
 at
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 university must know
English
 because of the
English
-speaking population.
In addition
 to
this
, there are many well-paid jobs who good at
mathematics
 in there. Unfortunately, some think that only studying these
subjects
 at all can make it difficult for a person to find his place in the future. Some people say that
students
study
 only these
subjects
 in order to find their place in the future, which is their biggest mistake. The reason why some think like
that is
 now many
students
 could not achieve their aim,
that is
,
students
 are learning only
mathematics
 and
English
, but in the end, they are changing their field to other sciences,
for example
, chemistry and biology and so on. I think
this
 is the largest downside of
this
.
On the other hand
, it
also
 has many advantages
although
 studying these
subjects
 has got drawbacks.
For instance
, as mentioned above,
mathematics
 and the
English
 language create many priorities for the human future. If
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student studies other
subjects
while
 learning math and
English
, they may delay the time to reach their goal. We consider
this
 to be one of the most beneficial aspects of time management. Another advantage is opportunities to participate in many competitions and get places,
that is
, currently, many competitions are held mainly in
mathematics
 and
English
.
To sum up
, the advantages outweigh
than
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the disadvantages
,
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 and based on my life experience, I have no bad opinion of those who want to
study
 only
mathematics
 and
English
.
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