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It has been observed in many countries recently that fewer students are choosing to pursue studies in science. Why is this happening? How might society be impacted by this?

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In several parts of the world,
Science
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 is not preferred by several
students
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. Fewer
students
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 are attending to study
science
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 in either colleges or universities.
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 issue happens
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 some reasons, and it can have negative effects on
society
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. There are several reasons why fewer
students
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 are not interested in studying
science
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 subject.
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, these studies are difficult and less attractive to more people.
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, student of
science
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 spends numerous hours understanding and studying these subject that may be more complicated.
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, my friend who studies Biology subject in his university usually spends more than 4 hours daily in the study
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,
students
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 who choose to pursue
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 sciences always spend their time only studying
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 the time limit that they have. They become more dissocial with their families and friends, they cannot practise their favourite sports and enjoy their time.
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, many
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 intended to study other subjects
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 as economics and business rather than sciences. A shortage of learners in
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 fields can have an adverse impact on
society
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. The first impact is that fewer
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 decide to learn about
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science
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, and there would be limited employees working in
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 field.
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 will lead to less technical development in
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.
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, it would be difficult to produce new smartphones and applications with better functions.
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,
while
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 significantly increasing the number of
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 who choose economic and business fields, job opportunities in
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 area will be limited.
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, many
students
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 who graduated are faced the unemployment issue which increase in
society
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. The lack of
science
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 graduates and inflation in graduates of other fields are caused instability conditions in the future and prevent human development evolution . In conclusion, a shortage of learners choosing
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 studies is caused by several reasons and
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 is affected
society
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.

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