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It has been observed in many countries recently that fewer students are choosing to pursue studies in science. Why is this happening? How might society be impacted by this?

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In several parts of the world,
Science
 is not preferred by several
students
. Fewer
students
 are attending to study
science
 in either colleges or universities.
This
 issue happens
due to
 some reasons, and it can have negative effects on
society
. There are several reasons why fewer
students
 are not interested in studying
science
 subject.
Firstly
, these studies are difficult and less attractive to more people.
Additionally
, student of
science
 spends numerous hours understanding and studying these subject that may be more complicated.
For example
, my friend who studies Biology subject in his university usually spends more than 4 hours daily in the study
this
 object.
Secondly
,
students
 who choose to pursue
such
 sciences always spend their time only studying
due to
 the time limit that they have. They become more dissocial with their families and friends, they cannot practise their favourite sports and enjoy their time.
Consequently
, many
students
 intended to study other subjects
such
 as economics and business rather than sciences. A shortage of learners in
science
 fields can have an adverse impact on
society
. The first impact is that fewer
students
 decide to learn about
this
science
, and there would be limited employees working in
this
 field.
This
 will lead to less technical development in
society
.
For example
, it would be difficult to produce new smartphones and applications with better functions.
Furthermore
,
while
 significantly increasing the number of
students
 who choose economic and business fields, job opportunities in
this
 area will be limited.
Therefore
, many
students
 who graduated are faced the unemployment issue which increase in
society
. The lack of
science
 graduates and inflation in graduates of other fields are caused instability conditions in the future and prevent human development evolution . In conclusion, a shortage of learners choosing
science
 studies is caused by several reasons and
this
 is affected
society
.
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