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The car is possibly the most convenient and popular way of getting from A to B. However, due to its impact on the environment and the risk it poses to pedestrians and motorists, governments should take urgent steps to reduce our dependency on this mode of transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the
car
 is flexible and widely used to travel from one place to another place ,but at the same ,time
car
 poses a high environmental risk for pedestrians and motorists .in my opinion I strongly agree because cars possess large of space on the road and are
also
 hazardous pollutant comes from the
car
 is high . on the one hand ,
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car
 has comparatively large length and width so it's occupied wider space on the road , which led to
traffic
 .
for example
 ,In 2016 every individual have a
car
 which led to large
traffic
 in Australia. the government made regulations against the issue by making large taxation for four-wheelers.ultimately it reduced
car
 consumption .the pedestrians and
also
 the motorist have benefited from the regulation by
traffic
 road.
conversely
, the 2010
car
traffic
 in Kolkata is huge so the government planned to construct a high bridge which led to reducing the
traffic
.
on the other hand
 , the
car
 has emitted hazardous materials
such
 as so2, and no2 .the no2 and so2 effluent mixed with oxygen ,the effluent air breathed by humans it might reduce the life of an individual .
for instance
 the iit students has made a survey and published the research paper. it showed the life expectancy of people is reduced over a period of time in the city
due to
 lifestyle and air pollution.so the government passed the regulation on the production of bs6 vehicles for the automation industry.
To conclude
, air pollution and the huge space occupied by
car
 has a negative impact on pedestrian and motorist ,so individual has promised not to take
car
 unnecessarily
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