The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
A glance at the table provided reveals the
number
of visitors who joined Ashdown museum
during the year before and after its reconstruction.And two charts illustrate the result of surveys that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
collected
from visitors who visited Add a missing verb
were collected
museum
Correct article usage
the museum
in
both times.It is obvious that Change preposition
at
museum
had a positive impact on Correct article usage
the museum
people
Change noun form
people's
opinion
after its repair.
Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
According to
the table
the Add a comma
,table
number
of people
who visited Ashdom museum
before its rehabilitation were 74000 person
.Meanwhile the Change to a plural noun
people
number
of people
who saw the museum
after refurbishment had considerably increase
to 92000 Change the verb form
increased
person
.One particular point Change to a plural noun
people
that
highlighted by the figure is that,in the inquiries,before Correct pronoun usage
apply
refurbishment
about 40 Add a comma
,refurbishment
percent
were dissatisfied to visit Change the spelling
per cent
museum
.Add an article
the museum
a museum
In contrast
,this
number
completely changed to satisfied
Wrong verb form
satisfy
people
after reconstruction
Correct article usage
the reconstruction
the
Change preposition
of the
museum
.
In
addition
the amount of Add a comma
,addition
person
who Fix the agreement mistake
people
were
very satisfied from 15 Change the verb form
was
percent
rose to 35 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
after Change the spelling
per cent
new
decoration of Add an article
the new
museum
.
As it is clear during Correct article usage
the museum
this
time the percentage of people
who did not answer to survey remained at 5 percent
in Change the spelling
per cent
this
period.Besides
.the number
of very dissatisfied people
had 5
Correct article usage
a 5
percent
decrease from 10 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
to 5 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
before and after reconstruction respectively.Change the spelling
per cent
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