The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, 

during the same two periods.
A glance at the table provided reveals the
number
of visitors who joined Ashdown
museum
during the year before and after its reconstruction.And two charts illustrate the result of surveys
that
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collected
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from visitors who visited
museum
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the museum
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in
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both times.It is obvious that
museum
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had a positive impact on
people
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opinion
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after its repair.
According to
the
table
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the
number
of
people
who visited Ashdom
museum
before its rehabilitation were 74000
person
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people
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.Meanwhile the
number
of
people
who saw the
museum
after refurbishment had considerably
increase
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to 92000
person
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.One particular point
that
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highlighted by the figure is that,in the inquiries,before
refurbishment
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about 40
percent
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were dissatisfied to visit
museum
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the museum
a museum
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.
In contrast
,
this
number
completely changed to
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people
after
reconstruction
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the reconstruction
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the
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museum
.
In
addition
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the amount of
person
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people
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who
were
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very satisfied from 15
percent
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rose to 35
percent
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after
new
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decoration of
museum
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the museum
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. As it is clear during
this
time the percentage of
people
who did not answer to survey remained at 5
percent
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in
this
period.
Besides
.the
number
of very dissatisfied
people
had
5
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percent
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decrease from 10
percent
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to 5
percent
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before and after reconstruction respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, museum, people, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor statistics
  • satisfaction survey
  • seasonal trends
  • demographics
  • benchmarking
  • feedback mechanisms
  • amenities
  • exhibitions
  • customer experience
  • turnaround
  • user engagement
  • footfall
  • improvements
  • disparities
  • perception
  • enhancements
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