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Some people think that e-books are the death of paper books while others think that paper books will never disappear. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Nowadays it is thought by some people that
e-
books
 are the death of paper
books
.
Otherwise
, others believe that it's impossible for paper
books
 to disappear. From my
perseption
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perception
, both types have their
adventages
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advantages
 and
disadventages
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disadvantages
. In the following
paragraphs
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 I will explain my point.
Firstly
, talking about
e-
books
,
they
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apply
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are universal.
For
example
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,example
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 you can carry so many
textes
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texts
 using only one small device. That's where paper
books
 have no
chances
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chance
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. Taking only a few huge ones will
full
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fill
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 your bag to the end.
Also
,
e-
books
 are more
resistable
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resistant
 to any damage, you can't cut
it
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them
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 off easily. But on the other
side
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,side
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 it is proven by
sientists
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scientists
, that reading from the monitor is less
helthy
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healthy
 for your eyes.
Therefore
electonical
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electronic
electrical
books
 are not so good, as it's thought by most of
users
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the users
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.
Secondly
, if we talk about classic
books
, they can be used even without
electicity
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electricity
, when using
e-book
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e-books
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 requires it for
the
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apply
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charging. You can take one
to
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on
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 the trip and do not worry that it will be out of energy. For
me
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,me
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 it's a big
plesure
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pleasure
 to read some book near the fire, and I can't imagine it using
the
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an
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 e-book. It just feels wrong. In conclusion, it's obvious that we won't see the end of the usual
books
 in the
comming
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coming
 future, as they still have a
lot
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oflot
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 benefits,
comparing
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compared
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 with
e-
books
.
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