Some people believe that a good way to reduce crime is to have longer sentences, while others think that there are alternatives to this problem. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is true that some individuals are in favour of spending a considerable period of time in jails and prisons to declining the number of crimes.
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, I completely believe that other ways of punishment should not be ignored and underestimated. On the one hand, in order to make human beings unwilling and optimistically cautious about the catastrophic results of their actions and behaviours, long-lasting and increasing the length of sentences play vital roles.
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could make them think more carefully about wasting their precious time and resources, which should have been spent in happy moments with family and friends.
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phenomenon not only has a great impact on people's decisions in terms of decreasing criminals'desires for behaving illegally but may
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put a stop to repeating those not noticeably important crimes.
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, if humans become aware that because of shoplifting or ,vandalism they should live over 30 years
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prisoning, they would neither intend to commit a criminal activity nor cooperate even having great proportions.
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from my perspective, a variety of punishments for diminishing crimes could be implemented for offenders.
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, the respected authorities could force them to have voluntarily social services in public for the
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remaining of their lives.
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, in Japan, if an ordinary citizen is condemned of burglary, as a penalty they have to work unpaid for almost 60 years.
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, jurisdictions can penalize the crime committed by simply costing hugely which greatly could reduce the numbers of them.  
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, I do believe that one of the best alternatives, is improving the countries' infrastructures in terms of having a strong economic status, which people never give a chance to treat against the law. In conclusion, in spite of obtaining the policy of rising the period of legal jurisdictions' sentences, I think other penalties could work better.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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