Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the cause? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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In my opinion, more people will explore different places in the future,
due to
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the access to travel is
even
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more
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easier for everyone,
such
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as, you can travel by car,
airplane
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, bus, bike, it is up to you. We need
understand
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to understand
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that the
world
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is not just our city, our community or simply our country.
Firstly
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, I believe that one huge cause for people
travel
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more is because of what they watch
in
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on
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social media, like
You tube
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Youtube
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. You can find normal guys, like us, travelling the
world
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without
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speaking
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more than one language,
some times
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sometimes
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alone or in couples and you will find
family
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a family
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with kids on the road
also
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.
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This
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adventures do not have excuses for just
spend
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spending
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your
lives
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life
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inside
yours
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home.
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, when you arrived in a different country, you have sure that you
do not know nothing
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from
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about
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the
world
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.
Make
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Making
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trips will help you to understand
another cultures
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another culture
other cultures
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, learn about history, taste different kinds of food,
meet
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and meet
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new friends.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, when you connect with different
persons
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people
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for
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from
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the
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apply
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other region, I believe that
you
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your
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knowledge will grow up a lot, and no one
have
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has
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the power
for
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to
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take
this
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for you.
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, my first international trip was the peace of the cake for me, because was so unreal
be
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in another country. I went to Barcelona, Spain and I was so happy, like a dream come true,
also
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,
last
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year, I have been
in
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to
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Cancun, Mexico, the best way
for
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to
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relax in your summer vacation. I can not wait for my next experience around the
world
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