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many people believe that the best way to reduce the amount of time spent on commuting is to invest in public transport, Others, however, think that there are other more effective ways to reduce commuting time. Discuss and give your opinion

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In
this
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 advancing world, there are a plethora of ways to transport.
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 few consider travelling in public
transit
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whereas
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 others commute in their own motor
vehicles
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 to bring down the amount of
time
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 they invest in commuting.
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, utilizing public transportation can save
time
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 and it should be the main mode of
transit
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. Civilians are flooded with several public
transit
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 options like Rail, Road and Airways to commute for their regular needs, especially in metros and urban centres. They should opt for public
transit
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 which helps in reducing
traffic
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 congestion and,
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, they can reach their destinations early.
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, in developed countries like Singapore govt authorities encourage its citizens to utilize public
transit
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 by offering discounts and at the same
time
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 they charge hefty amounts as toll charges on private automobiles within the city limits to avoid low
traffic
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 movement.
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, general people should consider utilizing the resources properly to save
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as well as
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 money.
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, using private
vehicles
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 for commuting definitely helps in saving
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 but
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 is all for
time
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 being. The dramatic rise in own
vehicles
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 will
further
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 slow down the movement of automobiles during peak hours and major junctions and,
as a result
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, people will start running behind
time
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. To give you an idea, we can compare the
traffic
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 congestion in major cities before and after the pandemic where the
traffic
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 movement fell rapidly and took hours to cover small distances. Even though private
vehicles
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 provide comfort and save
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initially
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, in the long run, they will definitely eat our
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.
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,
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, these are the reasons why I agree with the way to decrease congestion and air pollution by encouraging people to use fewer private cars and turn to
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 more public
transit
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 that the government provided.

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