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many people believe that the best way to reduce the amount of time spent on commuting is to invest in public transport, Others, however, think that there are other more effective ways to reduce commuting time. Discuss and give your opinion

#people #amount #time #transport
In
this
 advancing world, there are a plethora of ways to transport.
While
 few consider travelling in public
transit
whereas
 others commute in their own motor
vehicles
 to bring down the amount of
time
 they invest in commuting.
However
, utilizing public transportation can save
time
 and it should be the main mode of
transit
. Civilians are flooded with several public
transit
 options like Rail, Road and Airways to commute for their regular needs, especially in metros and urban centres. They should opt for public
transit
 which helps in reducing
traffic
 congestion and,
as a result
, they can reach their destinations early.
For instance
, in developed countries like Singapore govt authorities encourage its citizens to utilize public
transit
 by offering discounts and at the same
time
 they charge hefty amounts as toll charges on private automobiles within the city limits to avoid low
traffic
 movement.
Thus
, general people should consider utilizing the resources properly to save
time
as well as
 money.
However
, using private
vehicles
 for commuting definitely helps in saving
time
 but
this
 is all for
time
 being. The dramatic rise in own
vehicles
 will
further
 slow down the movement of automobiles during peak hours and major junctions and,
as a result
, people will start running behind
time
. To give you an idea, we can compare the
traffic
 congestion in major cities before and after the pandemic where the
traffic
 movement fell rapidly and took hours to cover small distances. Even though private
vehicles
 provide comfort and save
time
initially
, in the long run, they will definitely eat our
time
.
To sum up
,
Therefore
, these are the reasons why I agree with the way to decrease congestion and air pollution by encouraging people to use fewer private cars and turn to
use
Wrong verb form
using
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 more public
transit
 that the government provided.
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