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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays, a number of
children
 spend their free
time
 a
day
 on their
smartphones
. In my opinion,
this
 activity is a wrong habit, and
this
 will generate a drawback improvement for the
children
. Spending much
time
 daily on playing
smartphones
 is a negative event. The event occurred because
parents
 gave their
children
 a smartphone
instead
 of a book, and is less control from the
parents
.
Parents
 tended to do the former activity as they considered that it was a part of love even though that was the wrong mindset.
As a result
,
children
 could use
this
 wrong attention with playing on their
smartphones
 within a
day
. The latter act was done id by
parents
due to
 they had hectic schedules in their work in order to they did not have
time
 with their
children
 to evaluate them about their activities.
Consequently
,
children
 tend to play more without thinking about the
time
 even if they do not consider their diet
time
.
Furthermore
,
children
 will obtain disadvantages for what they did
such
 as obesity and less achievement in school. When
children
 played their digital phones
day
 and night, they tend to sit in front of their electronic phones which can boost obesity for them.
As a result
, they will experience physical illness which will disturb their lives
such
 as their education.
In addition
, less activity and no studying,
it
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affects
children
's achievement in school. When
children
 did not study, they will be lost their knowledge, and
also
 they tend not to do their homework.
Consequently
, their progress in school experience decreases. In conclusion, spending a lot of
time
 a
day
 on
smartphones
 will generate drawbacks for
children
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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